Carmine Valentina

A collection of the previously approved/denied character's applications complete with feedback posts for future reference.
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Approval?

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No
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Total votes: 3
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Carmine Valentina
Posts: 7
Joined: Wed May 15, 2024 8:54 pm
Age: 24
Gender Identity: Female
Race: Human
Aura Color: Blood-Red
Occupation: Second-in-command of the Cleaner
Semblance Name: Minezone
Weapon Name: Reconcile

Does this character meet the requirements for approval?
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Nero Zine
Posts: 56
Joined: Fri Nov 03, 2023 11:00 pm
Age: 20
Gender Identity: Female
Race: Faunus Snake
Aura Color: Dark Blue
Occupation:
Semblance Name: Affinity Change
Weapon Name: Caduceus

Although the weapon in itself is a bit redundant with the two forms, I like the character as a sort of mix between Tyrian and Roman, the semblance is cool, and I like the idea of a mafia
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Forrest Waldstein
Posts: 203
Joined: Wed Apr 12, 2023 6:51 pm
Age: 18
Gender Identity: Male
Race: Human
Aura Color: Green
Occupation: Student
Semblance Name: Sylvan Anthem
Weapon Name: Grashalm

Carmine is certainly an interesting character. We love a good criminal in this house. As for her Semblance, I like it, although it does look a bit familiar...

Nonetheless, Carmine gets my vote of approval!
Nature remembers all. Always make sure you give something back to the world when you take from it.

The sylvan theater hears Forrest in #00FF00 or #008000

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Professor Fiona L Caligo
Posts: 5
Joined: Sat Feb 17, 2024 2:36 pm
Age: 30
Gender Identity: Female
Race: Owl Faunus
Aura Color: White
Occupation: Professor of Security and Combat Medicine
Semblance Name: Lux and Void
Weapon Name: Circadian

Both weapon and Semblance are a bit bland as pointed out by others, but nothing is inherently wrong with the profile.
I'd ask you to maybe think of a more interesting alternate mode for her weapon rather than it just becoming a bigger club, there are plenty of options.

For now, I will withhold my vote.
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Carmine Valentina
Posts: 7
Joined: Wed May 15, 2024 8:54 pm
Age: 24
Gender Identity: Female
Race: Human
Aura Color: Blood-Red
Occupation: Second-in-command of the Cleaner
Semblance Name: Minezone
Weapon Name: Reconcile

ok, that is done and doone and i tried so sorry if it's a bit bland to your liking.
Phlox Fessenden
Posts: 50
Joined: Fri Feb 23, 2024 8:35 pm
Age: 17
Gender Identity: Male
Race: Faunus (Vampire Bat ears and fangs)
Aura Color: Indigo
Occupation: First year student, Junior Librarian
Semblance Name: Reverb
Weapon Name: Reqium Avengement

Well, there is a few flaws here, but really nice character. Like the weapon and the back ground, so that will be a yes from me.
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Professor Fiona L Caligo
Posts: 5
Joined: Sat Feb 17, 2024 2:36 pm
Age: 30
Gender Identity: Female
Race: Owl Faunus
Aura Color: White
Occupation: Professor of Security and Combat Medicine
Semblance Name: Lux and Void
Weapon Name: Circadian

With the added fixes, Carmine is adequate for role-play, has more than enough votes and is therefor approved for role-play on the site.

Have fun.
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